The Official Writing Challenge
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05/21/09
Great POV, and you really nailed this person's attitude.

Since it was written as a continual stream of consciousness, it was a bit awkward when the narrator jumped from one time/place to the next. Perhaps a *** between 'scenes', or even a bit of action/description to tell where he has gone would east the transistions?

I like that you didn't wrap it up neatly, but nevertheless gave us hope.
05/27/09
Well done. I like the hint of hope at the end.