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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Retreat (as in quiet time away) (08/01/05)

TITLE: It's Only In My Mind
By chandra mathis
08/01/05


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Being a wife and mother can be taxing alone, add working outside the home to the list, and you have the makings for what most folks call , enormous stress.

I often like to still away for just a few moments to clear my head from all the confusion going on around me, if anything just to daydream about some far away place.You know, kind of like one of those Calgon comercials. Oh, if that could be true, just call out Calgon take me away,then suddenly I would find myself hidden in a bath tub beneath a mound of luxurious bubbles away from it all, but I would have to add just one more thing, it would have to be on an island somewhere with only the sound of the wind and the birds.

At last, I am there, but it is only in my mind. What a heavenly retreat. Away from it all, no kids or husband, just a few seconds by myself. I can feel the bubbles all around me, my tired aching bones are beginning to feel better now, the breeze here on the island is blowing and there
are some seagulls up above making occasional cries. This is the life, why did I not think of this before?


Back to reality now, I am standing here washing all the dishes, my husband comes and sits down at the bar. He is reading his newspaper.
Why the nerve of this man. Reading his newspaper while I am still having to work. I began to feel resentment rising to the top and I struggled to push it back down. In my frustration, I began to let my mind wonder, longing for a perfect retreat. I thought it would be nice to really choose a perfect place to go, if I had the money . Where would I go ?

After a few minutes of thinking about all the possibilities, I had forgotten that my husband was sitting there. I turned around and looked upward. Then I said this prayer. God, you know I am in need here. I want that perfect place to go, just to retreat so I could get rested and feel like going for round two. Lord, If you would give me a
million dollars and an airplane, I promise you that I would fly out of here tonight.

Then I realized, my husband was still sitting there. He was looking at me with this puzzled look on his face, but somewhat serious at the same time. Then he said, "Well, where would you go? " Then I being shocked to find him still sitting there said, I don't have a clue, I will figure that one out on the way there. Then we both began to laugh
together. Soon, all the stress that I had been feeling was completely gone. God did not give me a million dollors, nor did he give me an airplane, but he gave me something better, the perfect retreat from all my cares, called laughter.


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Brandi Roberts08/08/05
Very nice ending! Laughter is certainly a God-given getaway. Thanks for sharing!
Shirley Thomas08/08/05
We all need those Calgon moments, don't we, even if is only in our minds. Good writing!
Debra Brand08/10/05
Amazing how life is! So true.
dub W08/11/05
Good imagery, break dialog and thoughts out to avoid confusion, a little structure and this is a good one.
Beth Muehlhausen08/11/05
Laughter is indeed medicinal! Enjoyed the reminder that the mind is the control panel of our lives - 'let this mind be in you which was in Christ Jesus.' Seemed there were some rough technical things that could be smoothed out, but the content is great. I liked this!
Linda Watson Owen08/11/05
Amen to laughter! Good point!
Sally Hanan08/12/05
This was funny. I think that the comments of the others re. spacing etc. would all be resolved if you preview your work, sentence by sentence, before you submit it.
Suzanne R08/14/05
Love the idea of laughter being the best retreat.
Karen O'Leary08/14/05
Thank you for sharing this memory. I love the humorous way in which you approached the topic. The ending was a surprise and so true. Best wishes with this piece.
darlene hight08/14/05
Loved the laughter retreat!