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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Retreat (as in quiet time away) (08/01/05)

TITLE: Beloved, Come Away
By Jan Ackerson
08/01/05


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Too long you’ve borne your pain alone
With heavy heart and soul;
You should not suffer on your own
When I can make you whole.
Beloved, come away with me!

The fence erected ‘round your heart
Without a gate or door
Works well to keep us two apart,
Although I long for more.
Beloved, come away with me!

You’re wondering about my ways;
Your spirit’s full of “whys.”
The lips that used to sing my praise
Reproach me now, with sighs.
Beloved, come away with me!

I know that you don’t understand
Your circumstances here.
The lovely life that you had planned
Has seemed to disappear.
Beloved, come away with me!

But I have plans that you can’t see
Until our hearts are one,
Until you yield control to me,
Your willfulness undone.
Beloved, come away with me!

So come away with me, my love,
And spend some time in prayer.
You’ll learn the peace and comfort of
My holy presence there.
Beloved, come away with me!


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Brandi Roberts08/08/05
Wow! Incredible! I loved this! A beautiful display of God's desire for us to turn to Him. Thank you VERY much for sharing!
Nina Phillips08/08/05
Amen. Beautiful and awesome poem! I was blessed reading today. God bless ya, littlelight
Shirley Thomas08/08/05
What a lovely invitation from our Father God, "Beloved, Come Away." Thanks for sharing your talent.
Crista Darr08/08/05
A beautifully inspired poem drawing others to our Savior. Lovely.
Debra Brand08/10/05
Good rhyme and verse!
dub W08/11/05
Some of the rhymes in couplets seemed contrived, but the meter held, good job.
Beth Muehlhausen08/11/05
Lovely thoughts, every one! I could feel the Father's desire to shelter me under His wing. :-)
Very nicely done.
Linda Watson Owen08/11/05
A lilting and sensitive poem. Thank you!
Sally Hanan08/12/05
You did a good job with this. It sounds like you have personally experienced the joy of surrender.
Suzanne R08/14/05
Beautiful. I love the theme through it all - the call to come away with Him. Well done.
Karen O'Leary08/14/05
Wonderful poem. I suggest you try and publish it. It is very inspirational. Good job!
darlene hight08/14/05
This is a beautiful piece! The flow is perfect and the message is one that is refreshing as well as true.
Marcell Billinghurst08/30/05
Your poem is beautiful and anointed written as an invitation from the Lord to Come away with Him. I could really identify with it. God bless you from your sister in Christ, Marcell
My email address is marcellnian@westnet.com.au