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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Good and Bad (05/07/09)

TITLE: The Profile
By Sharon Laughter
05/12/09


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“Okay, you people have Rosewood PD’s incident reports in front of you. Scott, tell us what you have.”

“Male, thirty to forty, homeless, unemployed, vagrant, unmarried.”

“Juvenile record?”

“Evidently, he ran away once when he was twelve. The record was never sealed. Other than that, nothing.”

“Family?”

“Brothers, sisters. Father was a carpenter, passed the trade onto his son. Keep in mind that means the guy’s strong with a muscular build.”

“Mother?”

“Delusional.”

“How so?”

“Believes God got her pregnant.”

Chuckles and snickers roll through the room then are swallowed in silence.

“So, does this guy buy into the delusion?”

“Definitely. Rumor has it that he not only believes he was Fathered by God, but he is God.”

“Subject organized or disorganized?”

"Definitely disorganized. He doesn’t seem to plan these things ahead and never seems to bring anything with him. Always leaves the crime scene a real mess.”

“How?”

"Well, there was this one incident in Garyville. Little town had a derelict, but they pretty much had the guy under control. You know, homeless, Vietnam Viet, mentally ill. The guy lived in the woods outside of town. He cut himself constantly, and howled like a coyote all night, but never bothered the people in town.. Our perp shows up and next thing you know two hundred pigs are flying over a cliff. The derelict is now running all over town, scaring people to death, hollering he’s “free.” Talk was, the Vet wanted to leave with our perp and his crowd, but our perp told him to stay behind so he could make a bunch of trouble. They all took off before Garyville PD could arrive on scene.”

“Any kind of signature at the crime scenes?”

“Every incident is different. We can’t figure out if its drugs or some kind of weird psychic hold he uses on people. He just walks up to some guy and next thing you know the guy’s walked off his job and starts following Mr. Charm all over creation.”

“Well, then he’s got to be stealing, robbing a bank or something in order to eat.”

“Nope. Not that we can tell. Just got these hypnotized people inviting him home - mostly seedy types. A couple of them have money, though. He’s so good that he got one of the best men over at IRS to quit his job he’d had for twenty-five years! Now that guy thinks he’s some kind of modern day robin hood. And, he does some kind of psychic healing – healed a bunch of blind people. DMV’s all backed up in Trent from old timers with cataracts and previously “sightly challenged” people demanding their licenses!”

“So, according to all the local PDs - why hasn’t this guy been apprehended?

“I’m telling you, chief, he’s slippery. It’s like he’s a vapor. He just dissipates into a crowd. I saw him do it when I was on surveillance a couple of times. Gives me the creeps.”

“Okay. Here the plan. Well pick out one of his groupies with a weakness. We’ll use that weakness to our advantage, if you know what I mean. Get him to give this clown up. If the groupie is under a spell, I guarantee you, the clank of change will snap him right out of it! Be careful though! There’s too many of these weird incidents going on that we can’t explain. The thing is, evidently this has gone on far too long and now the locals are looking to us. This guy is now being designated as a cult terrorist. It’s over PD’s head and on our table. I want this guy and I want him now. So far, we got kidnapping, practicing medicine without a license and I think they’re going to add attempted murder to that because he could’ve killed someone. They’re looking at child abuse for the epileptic kid. We’ve got destruction of property because of the hole in that guy’s roof and all those dead pigs. Crossing state lines takes things into Federal Court. Men, he’s now our Number One Most Wanted. Consider him armed and very dangerous. Bring him in.”

Heads bob and nod as bodies shove away from the table.

“Oh, Agent Richter? Warn the men about all that hocus pocus stuff. Until we know how he does that, tell ‘em to take every precaution and to watch their backs. I want nothing but a good ending to this thing.”

“Right, Chief.”


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Mary McLeary05/18/09
Good example of how the world might see our Savior.
Linda Boulanger05/21/09
Wonderful interpretation. Imaginative and captivating. Bravo and congratulations!!!
Kimberly Curry05/21/09
Very insightful. I could see this on 'Criminal Intent' or one of the 'CSI's'. I think it's tremendously helpful for Christians to see how non-Christians see we what we believe. It can make us more effective in conveying the Word of God by our words, and more importantly, how we live our lives.

Congratulations on 1st place!
Patricia Herchenroether05/22/09
Sharon, I just got a chance to read this and I love it! Very creative and so well written; sounds like somebody knows about P.D. briefings.
Blessings,
Patty
Sherrie Coronas05/23/09
Wow. I finally had time to read this weekend and this blew me away. This is such a fantastic analogy and was so fun to read.
Anthony Brown05/26/09
So good. It made me grateful He did not show up in my home town. Great !