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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Hard and Soft (04/23/09)

TITLE: Feeling Syntax
By Samuel Connelly
04/28/09


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They are all the same letters and words,
like liquid oxygen dancing on tongues,
syntax- formulated, constructed, with purpose,
and the heart and soul feels it upon reception

When I was a child I found sentences, like solid
cast-iron skillets slamming my body to the ground
to be pressed upon under so many granite nouns,
afraid of the verbs which brought them crashing down

When I was a young man I discovered silk, and
cotton, and fluffy words, which I hugged tightly
when I slept, for hope that they might fight off the
vicious congregation of dark adverbs, and pronouns

Feeling is expressed upon the tongue, created in the
depths of the soul, and gushes out from the broken
dam of coffee stained teeth. They are all words, all
letters; some are angry, some sweet, some hot, and cold

Sticks and stones have broken bones, but these literary
scars will never leave me. And with each opening of this
cavern to my soul, I must choose to give the hearer phrases
to cuddle with at night, or, a reason to sleep with the light on


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David O'Connell04/30/09
I get it: hard and soft words. Very clever. I like how you told a story of growing up in a place where harsh words hurt you, but then you turned it around in the end, after experiencing both hard and soft words, and have to decide what kind of words you will pass on.

Great poem, great message, great way to expressing the 'feeling syntax' effect.
Deborah Porter 05/07/09
Hi Samuel. I just wanted to leave a quick note to let you know your entry, Feeling Syntax, actually did very well in the Hard and Soft Challenge. Although you didn't receive an award, you made it into the Highest Rankings for Level 2, placing 10th in that Level. Well done.

If you'd like to check the highest rankings for yourself, you can find them here:
http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?p=373619

The highest rankings are posted every Thursday evening on the Message Boards.
Again, well done. :-)

Hope to see you at the FaithWriters' Conference in August.

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)