The Official Writing Challenge
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I Like this a lot! A picture of God's grace and the ways He works that are least expected. Good job!
A very tender story!

The two longer paragraphs at the beginninng and at the end lost me a little...breaking them down into shorter, more digestible bites, perhaps including some dialogue or description of action would help.

This left me with a very warm feeling.
The title drew me in. Great lines throughout - especially liked the "dark cloud" imagery.
You put the message across very beautifully. Well done.
I truly enjoyed this story very much. I did not have any problem following this at all. I guess I am wired differently then some but it was right one point. Good job and keep on writing.