The Official Writing Challenge
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I really liked what you wrote.
Perhaps for me it would have been easier to read if you had left a space between your paragraphs.
Well done,keep writing.
03/21/09
Lyrical writing, with lots of imagery. Keep it up!
03/26/09
Liked it, but...
were vs. where, run-ons (I'm guilty of these too), and some comma issues might have been corrected prior to submitting...on the plus side, you have an outstanding simile (as a thunderstorm) and metaphor (I am Your outstreched hand) in this piece and I kept them above any issues. Good job.