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Hi Norms, trust that you are well. Well the lord did protect us that day. Everyone from the church sent their wives and children to my house, so that I could protect them.It was rather funny as the mobs stormed my house in search of water and here I was one man against thousands. The tragedy of the Bisho Massacre was that Mandela's ANC actually had weapons and fired the first shots, knowing that the soldiers would have to defend themselves. They needed martyrs for their political cause. Most of the marchers were coerced into marching and did not realise that they were being used as pawns in a deadly political game. Ken.
Your emotional attachment to the land and its people is evident in your writing as well as your ability to journal events in a convincing way. Personally, I would have liked to have seen the events taking place in the first few paragraphs expanded so as I could get to know this family better, from both their personal and political POV. You have made them seem to be a very intriguing, caring and savvy family.
Those must have been terrible times of great anxiety. Thanks for sharing them.
HI ken, Thanks for your comments. In truth nobody except those that were actually involved know the whole truth and nothing but the truth. I read several different accounts of that day and all offered a different picture. We had those helicopters circling the bush in front of our house for many hours, we saw the masses coming over the hills into the bushes to escape. On both sides there were innocent victims, and what happened that day should never have happened at all.We saw the damage done to your home but unfortunately the word count didn't allow for every detail of that day. Love to you all,
What a terrifying day. I could feel the panic in your opening as you raced to the school. Praise the Lord for his protection of you and your children.
How terrible that people could do such a thing! So much anger, strife and evil. You made a change from reading about safari animals, but it certainly was not a REFRESHING change. This is a very powerful, if scary, story.
This was a very interesting and informative piece. I would have loved to see the first part expanded.

I was really getting into the story (memoir), then you shifted to a documentary style. I am not saying either style is better than the other. I'm just a person who likes to get to know the people rather than read about facts and figures. (So chalk this up to personal opinion.)
You have written great details about something that was certainly awful. I agree that I would like to see more "story" than documentary, but that is just my opinion.
This is especially good because it comes from someone who lived through that horrible day, not just researched the subject.