The Official Writing Challenge
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Good expressions of Eric's emotional turmoil. Everyone should have a friend like Eric's. :)
02/19/09
Good lesson here.

You slipped from present to past tense a few times, and an extra space between paragraphs might make this easier to read.

Glad that Eric had a good friend in his life.
02/19/09
Good message here.

Your piece would be easier to read if you put a space between paragraphs. If you type in Word, just hit return twice between paragraphs.

I also really liked the title.