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Good expression in this emotional piece. :)
02/19/09
Excellent and heartbreaking poem.
Very moving piece of poetry.
Blessings,
Norms
02/20/09
This poem contains vivid, powerful images.

If I may clear up a misconception from the first stanza. You wrote, "Iím a thorn in my familyís side.
While they anxiously till for a harvest I canít even sell my own hide." If the narrator of the poem is part of the Untouchable caste, as your title suggests, then the person's family would be in the same caste and also face the same issues. They would not be farmers or have a different social status.

Other than that, this is a well-written poem.
02/26/09
Congratulations, Josiah, well written and well earned rating. Welcome to Advanced (already!).

God bless richly.