The Official Writing Challenge
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02/19/09
It's heartwarming to read about people who respond so enthusiastically to God's call.

Writing suggestion: think about using more pronouns, and combining some of your short sentences into longer, more complex ones.

I like the "Ken and Barbie" bit--amusing!
02/19/09
I liked the characters you created in this piece. Good job.
Being a missionary in India is not a walk in the park. A good friend of mine was there with a team last year, and they came accross such opposition that they were forced to leave the country. It was her second time there.
Good work.
Blessings,
Norms
Nice contrasts between Nancy's and Judy's thoughts of India. :)