The Official Writing Challenge
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02/19/09
What a wonderful true story!

My main suggestion would be to work on commas--you have a few where they're not needed, and some missing where they are needed. Watch out for run-on sentences, too.

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this suspenseful story.
02/19/09
This story kept me riveted throughout. Gread writing.

Just a small note. Pondicherry is not a "village" but a city of over 5 million.

I enjoyed reading this story.
02/20/09
Wow, the competition is tough in intermediate this week...with good entries like this one...very good story telling here.
02/21/09
Precious story. :)
02/23/09
It is amazing how our animals sense danger when we don't understand what is going on. Great story.