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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: India (02/12/09)

TITLE: The Jewel of Abhay
By Mona Purvis
02/12/09


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The Jewel of Abhay


There he lay upon some rags,
His dirty face in tears.
The shanty roof above him sags,
His world reduced to fears.
Long days he worked, no time to play,
The Jewel of Abhay.

The diamond trade was all he knew.
At ten years old, he cut
Great stones reflecting every hue.
While hunger gnawed his gut.
Long days he worked, no place to stay,
The Jewel of Abhay.

His life was filled with endless shame,
He could not feed his mother
Whose eyes were blind and legs were lame,
She nursed his baby brother.
Long days he worked, no pain at bay.
The Jewel of Abhay.

The hopeless child would often squat
To work the cutting wheel.
The workshops hidden in Surat,
For innocence to steal.
Long days he worked, no wealth to weigh,
The Jewel of Abhay.

One slip was all it took to mar
The diamond in his hand.
The beating he received was far
More than a boy could stand.
Long days he worked, no words to pray,
The Jewel of Abhay.

Our God above was moved to see
This diamond He had made
So small, so hurt, so He set free
And into Heaven bade.
Long days he played, no need to stray,
The Jewel of Abhay.

Thousands of boys like Abhay are used in illegal child labor in India as diamond cutters.


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Jan Ackerson 02/19/09
This poem is EXCELLENT. I'd expect a poem like this in Masters level. I love everything about it--great use of all of the poetic tools, and very touching.
Kellie Henningsen02/19/09
Beautiful and yet so sad! I was hooked and had to keep reading. Normally poetry doesn't grab my attention and pull me in but this one certainly did!
Seema Bagai 02/19/09
I liked that your poem shed light on the tragedy of child labor in India. Wonderful choice of details and powerful emotions. Excellent work.
Norma-Anne Hough 02/20/09
Powerful and moving poem. Thank you for bringing to our notice the plight that so many children in these countries face.
Bless you.
Norms
Sunny Loomis 02/20/09
This is beautiful and heart rending. I would be very surprised if this didn't do well. Thank you.
Sonya Leigh02/20/09
Good rhythm, nice word selection, excellent poem.
Marlene Austin02/21/09
Excellent poetry form, nice repetition of the 5th and 6th lines in each verse.
Karlene Jacobsen 02/23/09
Lovely, heartfelt poem. I can find nothing to critique, as I know little of poetry, other than poetry rarely pulls me in. This was one of those that does.
Connie Dixon02/26/09
This was incredible writing. Congratulations on your 1st place and your E.C.
Gerald Shuler 02/26/09
I love to read excellent poetry, so, of course, I loved your entry. Congratulations on your EC, 1st place, and moving up to Advanced.
Chely Roach02/26/09
This was so wonderful... Congrats on your EC!
Clyde Blakely03/01/09
Powerful. Evokes our prayers.
Beth LaBuff 03/07/09
You really did a fantastic job with the thoughts and poetry in this. Super congrats on your EC and level placing!