The Official Writing Challenge
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The story line here is good. Just felt the MC's needed more description. Good entry.
02/14/09
Good wishes!

I wish I'd been more clear of the time frame of this story.
02/15/09
Nice story! Lots of good images in your writing.
02/17/09
I like the subtle presentation of this young man's search for Hope...difficult to find when one's works must please a god or gods. How grateful I am for the assurance that the hands that created me are the hands of the One who carries me!
02/17/09
I love the peaceful feel this story left me with. For ease of reading, you could have broken the dream paragraph into shorter paragraphs, but I found the dream and the wishes pleasing. I enjoyed this tale!
You transported me to the Andes and gave me a taste of the local flavor. I really liked the boy's three wishes. The dialogue in this piece was authentic. I enjoyed reading this, and I'm glad you got a highly commended on this one.