The Official Writing Challenge
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I could learn from this. Enjoyable in rythm and context.
01/23/09
I love it!!
Sooo clever and fun and a wonderful message, too.
GREAT job!
01/23/09
Excellent! Best poem I've read this week.
01/24/09
Very good I actually had to look this up on the internet. Good job.
I agree with the other comments- excellent poem from the Echidna's perspective, and a great lesson at the end. I thought the rhyme was a shade different in the final verse.
You wrapped a great message in this fun and informative poem which would be wonderful with illustrations for children, though the message is one of which we all need to be reminded.
I would love to see the meter be more consistent. If you haven't come across "Jan's Master Class" on the forums, it would be worth checking out. She has back classes available, including meter, via e-mail.
You had some wonderful alliteration in these lines:
Do they wonder why they waddle
Like a penguin or a puffin

He's content since God takes care
Of His creation large and small