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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Australia or New Zealand (01/15/09)

TITLE: A Lesson from the Australian Echidna
By Francy Judge
01/21/09


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Do echidnas ever wonder
Why they look the way they do
Why their stubby legs can't bounce
Like their neighbor kangaroo?

Do they wonder why a spiky guy
Stares back in their reflection
Why no one told the stylist that
Their hair needs some correction?

Do echidnas ever gripe
About another meal of ants
And wonder if there's something new
That might be worth the chance?

Do echidnas see their pointy snout
As something in the way
Or are they glad to roam the land
And vacuum up each day?

Do they ever feel peculiar
As a mammal who lays eggs
And grows its baby puggle
In the pouch above its legs?

Do echidnas ever watch an eagle
And wish that they could soar
Above Australia's forests
And glide from shore to shore?

Do they wonder why they waddle
Like a penguin or a puffin
And bear a strong resemblance
To a needle-bearing muffin?

Do people ever think that
We could learn a thing or two
From this oddball of a creature
With a different point of view?

He's content since God takes care
Of His creation large and small
So who are we to argue
With His purpose for us all?


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Karlene Jacobsen 01/22/09
I could learn from this. Enjoyable in rythm and context.
Eliza Evans 01/23/09
I love it!!
Sooo clever and fun and a wonderful message, too.
GREAT job!
Jan Ackerson 01/23/09
Excellent! Best poem I've read this week.
c clemons01/24/09
Very good I actually had to look this up on the internet. Good job.
Anne Linington01/25/09
I agree with the other comments- excellent poem from the Echidna's perspective, and a great lesson at the end. I thought the rhyme was a shade different in the final verse.
Holly Westefeld02/05/09
You wrapped a great message in this fun and informative poem which would be wonderful with illustrations for children, though the message is one of which we all need to be reminded.
I would love to see the meter be more consistent. If you haven't come across "Jan's Master Class" on the forums, it would be worth checking out. She has back classes available, including meter, via e-mail.
You had some wonderful alliteration in these lines:
Do they wonder why they waddle
Like a penguin or a puffin

He's content since God takes care
Of His creation large and small