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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Car Trip (07/18/05)

TITLE: Grandpa's Car
By Debra Bowers
07/20/05


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“Oh boy” we’re taking Grandpa’s car!
It smells so clean and new
I wonder if we’re driving far
Maybe town? The zoo?

Grandpa has a special seat,
That pulls down in the middle
I sit upon to see the street
Cause I am sorta little

My Mom and Dad are going too
But in the model A
Along with boys that number two
Will journey on our way

Mamma made me dress up sweet
With paten leather on my feet
And dressed me in my favorite dress
That Grandma made last Christmas

I wonder where we’re going to
As in the cars we climb
And think about the things we’ll do
What treasures we will find

Grandma sits in back with me
Her fur coat warm and soft
She smells of lemon maybe tea
With feathered hat aloft

The cars start up and off we go
As Grandpa leads the way
Sometimes fast, but mostly slow
Cause of Daddy’s Model A

Our journey ended far from home
Upon a hill with trees
With lots of people standing round
Some upon their knees

I didn’t understand the tears
In such a pretty place
But love the smell of flowers near
The feel, the piece, of grace.


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Linda Watson Owen07/25/05
Beautifully childlike tone and cadence. And like the speaker, I as a reader didn't see the reason for the ride until the end.
Bronwyn Johnson07/27/05
This is a great piece! I love the rhythm and ryme. Well done. May god bless you always!
Nina Phillips07/27/05
Enjoyed reading the poem, very smooth and nicely written. Childlike faith it seems. God bless ya, littlelight
janet rubin07/27/05
Absolutely beautiful. I was right there in the backseat with her!
Monique Fox07/27/05
I would love for you to submit wonderful poems like this to my group "Poetry and Poets of God": http://groups.yahoo.com/group/poetryandpoetsofgod/
Peggy Yengling07/29/05
Oh, I was riding happily along, too, ready for a carefree day! Suddenly, I caught my breath as I comprehended the meaning of the ride! At that same moment, the peace and grace mentioned in your poem also filled my own heart. Well done!
Beth Muehlhausen07/30/05
Loved this - the childlike tone, word choices, and rhythm, and the surprising ending. Well done!