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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: The Reason for the Season of Christmas (12/04/08)

TITLE: Christmas Paradox
By Connie Dixon
12/11/08


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*’Tis the reason for the season
Wa wa wa wa wa wa wa wa wa

Get your coat, come on it’s freezin’
Wa wa wa wa wa wa wa wa wa

Short on cash forget that budget
Wa wa wa wa wa wa wa wa wa

Visa – Mastercard, just charge it.
Wa wa wa wa wa wa wa wa wa



Ed’s rejected demeanor evidenced itself in the weary lines of his furrowed brow. He entered the ordinary house by way of the back door, shook the snow off his boots and stepped onto the clean but worn linoleum. The simple house was void of extras, but Marlene kept it spotless.

Marlene appeared in her out-of-season, cotton gingham dress. It had been washed so many times, there were a couple of spots where the thread barely held it together – but it was the better of the two dresses she owned. Little Sammy, clad in a diaper and second-hand t-shirt, clung tightly to her leg.

She walked to the stove to stir the steamy hot noodle soup. It was supposed to be chicken noodle, but the aroma of celery and onions far outweighed the modest amount of chicken that had actually been added.

She turned from the soup to glance at Ed. “Any luck, Honey?

“No Sweetheart.” The timbre of his voice revealed a weary disappointment. “There was an opening down at the paper mill but they hired this young guy ahead of me. He said he had four kids and a mother-in-law to feed.”

“What are we going to do? We’ve got seven dollars left and then we’re totally broke. We can’t pay the rent, we can’t pay the heat bill, and we barely have enough food to get us through to Christmas.

Hard times fall on folks forgotten
La la la la la la la la la

Help is nowhere to be gotten,
La la la la la la la la la

Hopes are dashed and dreams are broken
La la la la la la la la la

God-less prayers are but a token,
La la la la la la la la la


Barb cried softly into her thick down pillow. The bulky bag of feathers muffled her cries and kept her from waking her husband of 27 years. She and Jerry were inseparable, high school sweethearts, business partners and best friends. For the first time in all these precious years, she had a secret – and she didn’t know how to reveal it to him….he would be devastated by the news.

Two weeks earlier, she had seen her physician for a routine physical. The doctor found something peculiar in her breast but was positive that it was just a harmless mass of tissue. He sent her to the lab for tests as a precaution. The results were back – and they were not good. In fact, not only did she have cancer but it had already advanced to Stage IV – Distant metastasis. This distressing news was sure to send Jerry off the deep edge. Barb’s detective work provided the revealing fact that she would most likely fall victim to the deadly disease within the 6 months before Christmas.

Worship Jesus, Son of Mary,
Awe awe awe awe awe awe awe awe awe.

King of Kings yet ordinary.
Awe awe awe awe awe awe awe awe awe.

Extend a hand to help that stranger,
Awe awe awe awe awe awe awe awe awe.

Bow before that lowly manger.
Awe awe awe awe awe awe awe awe awe.



*Sung to the tune of Deck the Halls


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Judith Gayle Smith12/11/08
I feel your hunger to add more and more real-time tragedies to this prose. We rarely take time to consider those who are most in need of His warmth, His love, His covering and His salvation. Christmas can indeed be a grievous time for those who suffer, but as obedient and loving servants of the Christ, we must take the time and action to be the instruments of God that we are called to be.

If we know these folks, or others like them, we must go and tell them His truth - and if they do know Him - then extend compassion, hard-earned money that we may have, food for the table and hugs for the children.

You have encouraged my blatherings! But I thank you so much for your compassion for others.
Judith Gayle Smith12/12/08
I just read this again, singing the stanzas to my husband. How much more powerful this became. I was in tears before the last stanza.
Marlene Austin12/15/08
Interesting writing style. Nice job. :)
Teresa Lee Rainey12/16/08
I really love your stories here, and the main lines of your version of "deck the halls" is wonderful. I did get a little thrown off by the wa, la, and awe, and might suggest leaving that line as just "fa la la" like the song, but that could be just me. Wish you would have been able to add a few more stories for greater impact. Although this is already pretty impactful as is.
Betty Castleberry12/16/08
I really like this format. It makes the piece unique and interesting. Good message, too.
Pamela Kliewer12/16/08
Reading this again, with the tune in my head, really did make this more powerful. Well done. Creative.
Jan Ackerson 12/16/08
Both the prose and the poetry were well-written and compelling.

However, I felt a disconnect between them--not really sure how they related to each other. I'd have kove to know more about the people portrayed in the narrative sections.

Great title, and cute (punny) hint!
Leah Nichols 12/17/08
I agree to stick with the fa-la-la's - and I think the writing's great....but the stories seem unresolved. I would like to see more of how their situations turned around, with hope as the resolution. Anyway, that's my HO. Very creative entry!
Karlene Jacobsen 12/17/08
Yes, the fa la la la would probably fit better.
It is tough to get all you want to say into such a short boundary, I know. However, expansion could definitely help with the two narratives. I felt left hanging, with nothing resolved.
This is really good writing.
Catrina Bradley 12/17/08
Superb writing in the 2 scenes, and I like the re-written lyrics. I like the wa wa's la la's and awe awe's. They reflect the mood you portray in each stanza of the song. Wa wa - whatever, just charge it. La la, la-ti-da - I don't see the person in need. Awe Awe - I'm in awe of my Lord. I do agree that I feel like I'm left hanging, but after reading a 2nd time, I see that the last stanza IS the resolution to the problems. Stand in awe of the Lord, worship Him, trust in Him through the storms in your life.


   
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