The Official Writing Challenge
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Interesting storyline. :)
11/30/08
Hey, I'm almost scared leaving a comment here! Wow, what an intense, anger-driven storyline. I hope she managed to forgive her husband in the end.
Let me make one comment to help you improve your writing. In my opinion your sentences are overly swaddled in adverbs and adjectives and your writing would be more readable if you trimmed a few of these out. Take some time to read through the entries in Advanced and Masters (don't forget to leave comments)and look at how different writers form their sentences. That's all part of the joy of being in FW - learning together and helping one another to improve.