The Official Writing Challenge
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Compelling story, but I would have liked some details explaining MC's survival if everyone else died in the fire - without the details it seemed a little strange. :)
I enjoyed the dialogue between husband and wife tell of their joyous news for Christmas. Though the ending is sad, I like the unexpected in a story.
11/30/08
A charming first scene, full of easy-going intimacy and satisfying dialogue. But I felt that your transition was too sudden, that it left far too many unanswered questions. An additional couple of paragraphs would have made all the difference.
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