The Official Writing Challenge
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Interesting characterizations in this writing. Perhaps putting in dialogue would help the reader get to know the players, their feelings, hopes, longings, etc. better. :]
The Retrievers? Are we talking about a canine family here? I've read thru it a couple of times & it makes sense if they are. If not, sorry, no offense meant. It's still a good read.
12/04/08
Congratulations on your 2nd Place win in Level 2, Noreen. Time to move up to Level 3 now.

With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)