The Official Writing Challenge
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Unique story line for the topic. For this to be the "first baby", Amy seemed awfully composed. :]
11/30/08
I love the premise of your story and the characters! The dialogue is a tad stilted...I think it would connect more with the reader if you polished up the conversations so that they seemed more "real" and "natural". Like: "I'm taking you.." Instead of "I am taking you...". You really should consider a second go-over for the dialogue because it's very charming and with that little bit of tweaking, it will shine!