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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Christmas Gifts (11/13/08)
Dear Dad,
You know I’ve NEVER been good at wrapping presents, and…well, frankly it hasn’t changed much. Remember the time when I used 4 different colored wrapping papers for Katy’s present? I’ve had more experience since then and, because it’s for you, I tried my best to catch your eye with all the appeal. I used your favorite color; as long as you’re looking at the top, I used your favorite material; just lift the tape up, it’s there, under the 3rd layer, I even followed YOUR instructions; every single one I could understand. Dad, I worked HARD on this. I did everything I could so this would be the best present I’ve ever given you; I got frustrated, I got tired, I got confused, but I finished it!(and even passed up a bowling invitation to do it!) I can’t wait ‘till you see it! Maybe it won’t drop your jaw in awe but I KNOW you will love it once you…wait…oh….I forgot about the best part! I got so caught up in hoping to catch your attention, I forgot about how you told me that you would always “make waste of the outside, with haste for the inside.” I know that whether it was wrapped as flawless as a candy bar or as carelessly as leftovers in foil, you still have to rip it off and throw it away to even receive the gift. Thank you that you are that way, because believe it or not the outside was just a tad-bit more extreme in it’s mistakes then I mentioned, but you can recognize the effort! But, the true gift is on the inside! I can’t imagine the joy I believe you will have when you see it! No, I mean this gift will NEVER QUIT giving! It was the only thing that you deserve, and boy you deserve it ALL! As a matter of fact I want to give you this gift on Christmas, Christmas Eve, be-laded Christmas, the whole week of Hanukkah, Thanksgiving,…Father I can’t help it I want to give you this gift EVERY day! Father I don’t even want to contain myself anymore. I’m going to give it to you right now! Father my gift to you, contained in this imperfect, pathetic, package…IS…..MY WHOLE-HEART!! Surrendered to your will, willing to serve you, serving to please you, pleasing you no matter what it takes, and just doing whatever it takes with joy, for your praise and glory! Father this gift is YOURS, you may do with it whatever you desire! Please enjoy it (I know I will)! I know this is only my first gift to you…but I promise it won’t be my last. Thank you for your gift! I can’t wait to finally see you!…
LOVE,
Your Child


P.S. Please help me with my “gift-wrapping.”
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Lisa Cox
11/21/08
Really good story and you left us wondering if it was God til the end but I had my hunch.

My suggestion would be to make some different paragraphs. It is hard on the eye with so much all together. Content great, presentation not so great...kinda like the gift wrapping :) Great Letter to the Father.
Marlene Austin
11/23/08
Understood and enjoyed the last part of this. Confused about many references in the first part - "favorite color", "favorite material", "under the tape", "3rd layer". Perhaps utilizing more of the alloted word count would have helped clarify some of these points. :)