The Official Writing Challenge
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11/01/08
I enjoyed this poem very much. It reminds me of a children's song with an English setting that I can't at this moment bring to mind. But I like your contrasts with the expectations of an earthly king and what our heavenly king desires of us. It was beautifully done.
11/02/08
Very nicely done!
Nice idea for your poem. Good use of the repeating line. :)