The Official Writing Challenge
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10/09/08
I enjoyed this beause of the hope at the end. My mother will be playing piano for the carolers I'm sure.
10/10/08
Lots of good imagery here in the little details you included.

There was a sudden POV switch about halfway through that might need to be signaled with a triple asterisk, and some of your dialogue seems a bit stilted--try using a few contractions to make your people talk more realistically.

The first half of this is particularly well-written.
A well written, poignant story. :)
Such a sad memory of caroling. Nicely written. Thank you.
ps. I'm glad there was the light of hope at the end.