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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Christmas Carols/Carolling (10/02/08)

TITLE: The First Christmas Carol
By vincent lyons
10/08/08


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On the night of Jesus’ birth,
When the Saviour came to earth,
Heaven’s angels sang their godly praise on high;
For the baby in the stall
Who had come to save us all,
The greatest ever Christmas Carol filled the sky.

The poor shepherds as they watched,
Caring for their little flocks,
Were observers of the great angelic throng,
Would bear witness to the world
Of the birth of Christ the Lord
And the glory of the angels mighty song.

In great haste the shepherds came
To observe the news proclaimed,
To look on Him, who was Israel’s promised Christ.
When they saw the baby boy,
Their hearts overflowed with joy
And returning home they marveled and rejoiced.

Blessed song the angels sung,
Which proclaimed the Promised One,
Is the greatest Christmas Carol ever heard,
Promised peace on earth to men
Through the One who’d pay for sin---
The fulfillment of a great prophetic Word.

“Glory be to God on High;”
Join the chorus of the sky---
Keenly watching for the Lord to come again;
Now as we recall His birth,
Let us all be on alert;
Be rejoicing at the coming of the King.


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Jan Ackerson 10/10/08
A lovely original Christmas carol--thanks so much!

I love that the meter is different from the usual 8,6,8,6 meter of lots of poetry--but your 3rd line sometimes tripped me up in its rhythm. Just a bit of figiting with it might make the poem flow more smoothly.

I liked this a great deal.
Holly Westefeld10/10/08
This is a lovely carol, and your use of slant rhyme is well-done.
Most of your longer lines have eleven syllables, but a few have twelve, and I confess that I did not try to detect the meter.
I, too, like your use of this less common rhyme scheme.
Beckie Stewart10/10/08
I enjoyed your poem on the first Christmas Carol.
Linda Wright10/13/08
This is a beautiful poem on the first Christmas carol. I especially like how you told the story of the first carol sung by angels at Jesus' birth, but moved on to a lovely reminder that this same Jesus is soon to come again and that we should be alert and watching.
This was right on topic!
Marlene Austin10/15/08
Nice job stating the purpose of Jesus' birth in poem form. Excellent writing. :)