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10/10/08
A lovely original Christmas carol--thanks so much!

I love that the meter is different from the usual 8,6,8,6 meter of lots of poetry--but your 3rd line sometimes tripped me up in its rhythm. Just a bit of figiting with it might make the poem flow more smoothly.

I liked this a great deal.
10/10/08
This is a lovely carol, and your use of slant rhyme is well-done.
Most of your longer lines have eleven syllables, but a few have twelve, and I confess that I did not try to detect the meter.
I, too, like your use of this less common rhyme scheme.
10/10/08
I enjoyed your poem on the first Christmas Carol.
10/13/08
This is a beautiful poem on the first Christmas carol. I especially like how you told the story of the first carol sung by angels at Jesus' birth, but moved on to a lovely reminder that this same Jesus is soon to come again and that we should be alert and watching.
This was right on topic!
10/15/08
Nice job stating the purpose of Jesus' birth in poem form. Excellent writing. :)