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10/09/08
Thank you for this story. It's one we all need to remember. Sometimes it may not be convenient or comfortable but it's to make the best choice.
10/09/08
Having a brother with Down Syndrome, I appreciate any piece in which such people are treated with compassion.

I think it'd be more effective to describe his speech as "thickened" or some such adjective, but not to try to render it phonetically. It makes your reader work too hard to translate it, and detracts from the flow of your piece.

Well done, sweet story.
10/10/08
Thank you for your sweet story. My favorite person in the whole wide world right now is a little girl in my Children's Church class named Rebecca. She's six years old and has Down Syndrome. When she sings songs about Jesus her whole face lights up and she sings loudly with everything she's got. I'm not a much of a sentimentalist so stories that have coincidences in them don't always move me. However, this is an exception because it really wasn't a coincidence. The three of you were sent by God on a mission. Excellent story.
Moving story, tenderly written. Well done. :)
Awwwwww, you made me cry! I love this. Excellent delivery of a beautiful story.
What a beautiful story. I love how God can use us, without our knowledge, to help others. Congratulations on first place. Well deserved.