The Official Writing Challenge
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You have excellent description in your suspenseful story.
09/20/08
Ooooo. Very good. I almost took a similar approach to this week's topic.

I was a bit confused about how he got there in the first place, but that may just be me. :)

Great job with this one. Keep up the good work.
I would have preferred more information given in dialogue. It was difficult to understand how the MC's thoughts knew the captor's origin, riot history, etc. Also, not enough info to know how and why the MC became captive. The descriptive, tension-setting writing was very good, I would just recommend focus on clarity of plot. :)