The Official Writing Challenge
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08/22/08
An interesting approach--almost like little flashes into the lives of your different characters.

Consider writing a story like this with dialogue alternating with description. That helps your readers to get to know the characters better.

Lots of potential in this little story!
Nice story and Angela is a great friend. It would have helped me know quicker who was actually speaking and which were thoughts if you had used quotation marks for "actual words" and italics for thoughts. Loved the way you left this open to the next person Angela might be praying for... :)
08/23/08
Hi: Yes there is a battle to be won and not always quickly answered as in your story. Would be interesting to know more about your characters and expand your story - great ideas and writing - thank you for sharing.
08/25/08
A great reminder for us to pray for our friends! There are so many out there who want to deceive us!