The Official Writing Challenge
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True, moms know things you think they could never know. Could it be because they have eyes in the backs of their heads? Enjoyed this story.
08/22/08
I really like the snappy dialogue here, interspersed with interesting action...a unique and very readable writing style.

In the 8th paragraph, be careful of using "it's" for "its".

That's a teensy nitpick--this is a really good story.
Lively story, flows smoothly. Your title presents a unique question about this topic. :)
08/26/08
A fun read that sped along at a nice clip.