The Official Writing Challenge
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Your story was very suspenseful and mysterious. The last line really came as a surprise.
Lovely story, well written. Just one line gave me a "bump": "They required, nor desired, anything from the outside." Did you mean: "they neither required, nor desired, anything from the outside."?
Very well written. You have a gift for detail. You tell the story of destruction very well. Your addition of the sparrow speaks volumes about the love of our Father. We may not know where our help will come from, but we know who sends it. Very good.