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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Bridge (07/31/08)

TITLE: The Young Man.
By Elizabeth Hexberg
08/04/08


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A young man in the darkness.
Kneeling in the dirt.
Alone,
in pain,
and sobbing hard.
Spilling out his hurt.

"Abba, Father, help me.
Hear this humble heart.
I am afraid to face tomorrow,
must I play this part?"

The young mans body trembled.
His 'lot in life' so cruel.
So young, so pure, so Holy,
to be Gods Greatest Tool.

"Abba, Father, give me strength.
I don't know what to do.
Take my hand and lead me now,
in 'All', to honor You."

The young mans brow was dripping sweat.
Gods Heart surely bled.
HE, and all of Heaven wept,
and the drops of sweat turned red.

HE whispered to 'The Holy Lamb',
"Be not afraid, My Son.
You are to be 'The Bridge of Life'.
In You, My Will is done."

The young man,
Gods Son,
Jesus Christ.
Stood up to face His Fate.
Blood and tears,
'Salvation Bridge',
from Sin to Heavens Gate.


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Judith Gayle Smith08/07/08
A paean of beauty - a true worship of our wondrous Saviour and His Christ...thank you.
Verna Cole Mitchell 08/07/08
You brought the bridge to salvation alive in your reverent poem.
Valerie Routhieaux08/08/08
Awesome. Well done.
Helen Paynter08/11/08
Great message, of course. On a technical note, you've got the meter pretty good except in one verse, where it loses its bounce. That may have been your intention, of course :) Altering the meter can have a powerful effect on the reader - pulls him up short.
Lyn Churchyard08/12/08
Very, very moving. I was especially touched by the stanza The young mans brow was dripping sweat.
Gods Heart surely bled.
HE, and all of Heaven wept,
and the drops of sweat turned red.


A great take on the topic, beautifully done!
Helen Dowd 08/15/08
Elizabeth, this is wonderful! It gave me goosebumps. You kept the climax to the end, where climaxes should be. At first, I hadn't realized who the young man was...Thank you "Young Man" for being a bridge for us all....Helen
Joanne Sher 08/17/08
Lovely, with an incredible message. (This DOES deserve a bit of a better title, I think, to go with the wonderful wordsmithing)
Darna Bedwell Gutter07/05/09
Beautiful depiction of our savior's torment. I especially liked you description of the sweat turning to blood. The Lord bless you dear Elizabeth.