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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Beach (07/04/05)

TITLE: *Come And Sit With Me*
By Holly Laux
07/05/05


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As I sit along the waters,
To contemplate your will,
Your tide is so unchanging,
You move when I am still.

The breeze upon my face,
I know is breath from you,
Surrounding me like a blanket,
A tapestry of blue.

The sands on which I walk,
Represent your unending love,
A peace that passes understanding,
More vast than the skies above.

Wading in the peaceful waters,
So tranquil and pristine,
Each element of your holy beach,
Is of Heaven still unseen.

I look out in the ocean,
Knowing you created this place,
Where every wave is perfect,
The grains of sand your grace.

The sun reflects the golden waves,
I hear the sea gulls cry,
The sand shifts beneath me,
My time is growing nigh'.

As I stand to leave the beach,
Everything stands still,
I didn't come here by accident,
It was always in your will.


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Debra Bowers07/11/05
"Perfection!" You captured a special moment along with my heart. Thank you for writing this and God Bless you, you talented person!
Shirley Thomas07/11/05
Wonderful!
Amy Verlennich07/13/05
It ryhmes, but the rhythm is a little "off" in some parts. Beautiful images though! Thanks for sharing!
Blessings, Amy
Peggy Yengling07/14/05
This is beautiful! I can feel it all - the sand, the ocean, the warmth, the peace. Your words take the reader right to the beach and 'walk' them through the sand! Lovely!
Shari Armstrong 07/14/05
A nice poem -enjoyed it very much.
Nina Phillips07/14/05
Very good poetry. Enjoyed reading it.
God bless, littlelight
Beth Muehlhausen07/15/05
I admire this entry since poetry is not my preferred genre! It is a very nice piece, very gentle and reassuring. Good job!
Linda Germain 07/16/05
Very nice. (A good poem to read AT the beach). :0) Well done.
Maxx .07/17/05
loved it. The second stanza made me stumble a bit. But the rest was near perfection. Thanks!
Dave Kemp07/18/05
I agree with the comments about rhythm but I really loved the thoughts you expressed in this poem. From one 3rd place to another, WELL DONE!