The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, chills!! So many things happen that could be avoided. You got me with the dectective--very nice (chilling!) twist. Good job!
Very well done and an excellennt use of the prompt!
Excellent chill! These sorts of unpleasant stories need to be told to the sometimes "know-it-all" youth of today, so they will learn to listen to the wisdom. Not all that Christians need to understand is sweet and uplifting. Well done.

Couple of edits: "liked the look" should be in past tense like the rest of the sentence, and "cognisant thoughts" is possibly a tautology, as thoughts are generally cognisant.
Ick (meant in a good way!). A very vivid account here and a good reminder that people are not what they seem. Well-written, though I did spot a few typos.
Wow I honestly never thought of a telephone in such a manner. Hmm....a very interesting and thought-provoking perspective.