The Official Writing Challenge
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Imaginative, well expressed except that para.5: 'cold streaks of rain landed' etc and the last para: 'yearning for long awaited rain' seem a little our of sequence. Perhaps grateful would be more appropriate than yearning? God bless you.
07/26/08
I really liked this. The imagery was strong throughout. I especially liked this line: 'Low thunder lingered like the roll of a percussionist on tympani...'
I ADORED this piece and found it hard to note the several things needing correction. Watch all tenses for agreement, and always use your apostrophes and hyphens when they are needed. They distract us grammar nerds terribly. Keep up the good work!