The Official Writing Challenge
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07/26/08
I loved the point you made about not needing a phone to connect with God. The humor was just right in the exchange about the drinks and snacks at the beginning.
I enjoyed your use of conversation to carry the action of your story. I missed a few details the first time and had to re-read it, but its point was very clear. Thanks