The Official Writing Challenge
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06/13/08
Oh, I can see the beloved old man firing arrows all over the country via the descendants. Very picturesque writing.
06/14/08
I love the alliteration in "teasing tongue and tender touches." This is very well-written, but may put off readers with its large block of unbroken text.

Very nice job.
06/17/08
I loved how you saw him one more time through the family members sitting there--Families are so special that way. It's a bond that is deeper than the surface...