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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: The Family Reunion (06/05/08)

TITLE: Welcome Home Baby Boy
By Terry Walker
06/07/08


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She adjusted her pearls in the mirror as the sounds of her family gathering below flowed over her like the smell of her favorite perfume. It’s been so long since we’ve been together, she thought, now everyone is home. She tugged at her blouse one last time and turned to go downstairs to join the family. Standing in the door watching her was Jed Delaney, her sweet Jed, her beloved husband of over twenty-five years.

“Martha, you look radiant as usual,” Jed said as he took her hand, “the gang’s all here, are you ready?”

“Yes, darling,” she said as she pecked him on the cheek.

They descended the stairs into the front parlor, a crackling fire welcoming them. At the bottom step waiting on them was their oldest son, Michael, who had arrived just a few moments before. Michael grabbed Martha and gave her a big bear hug, “Mom, it is so good to see you and dad, I’ve missed you so much.”

Beside Michael was Jackie O, as they called her, a nice Irish girl named Jaclyn Katharine O’Reily before she became Michael’s bride and mother to their two sons, Matthew and Mark, and yes, they are working on Luke and John.

Mary Beth, the only daughter, sat in the overstuffed leather wing chair, looking like the princess she was. As her mother approached, she rose and they embraced, communicating as only a mother and daughter could. Mary Beth hooked her arms through Martha’s and they turned toward Ross. Ross was the baby of the family and Martha mothered over him as he grew up. Often Martha refused to let him join in with his friends, “They’re such a rowdy bunch,” but Ross never really would mind as he knew Martha would make it up to him somehow.

Martha walked over to Ross and adjusted his tie, “A man in uniform can’t have a crooked tie,” she said. “You look so handsome in your dress blues.” She reached down and put a letter in his hand. “You can read it later, it’s just mushy mom stuff.” She looked at Mary Beth and together they straightened the flag that draped Ross’ coffin, Martha looked back at Ross. “Welcome home baby boy, now the family is all together once again.”


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Helen Murray06/13/08
I wept over this one. You showed the feelings rather than telling about them. That is great craftsmanship.
Everest Alexander06/13/08
I was stunned by the ending - Did not see that coming! This article is well-crafted and expertly told. Loved the part about the 4 Gospel-named kids - Very funny. I am impressed!
Stella Walsh06/14/08
Wow! What an ending. Excellent build-up. Super work!
Karen Wilber 06/14/08
Did not see the ending coming. This needs a tissue warning, except that it would give it away. Your descriptions let me react to each character in turn and made me more sympathetic to them. I got attached to the family and wanted to see where this was going. So when I read the end I was shocked. Well done.
Patty Wysong06/16/08
Oh! You got me with that ending! Great job!
Catrina Bradley 06/17/08
Great writing - and a super sad/twisty ending. Well done.
Sara Harricharan 06/18/08
Oh my! What an ending, I should've caught the hint that it wasn't quite as it seemed. So sad, almost, but you make it different. Nice job! ^_^
Mariane Holbrook06/18/08
Oh, my! This is indeed a tissue alert. Such a tenderly written piece with such an ending! Kudos!!!
Pamela Kliewer06/18/08
Oh. My. You had me crying on this one... I didn't expect that ending. Very well done.
Norma-Anne Hough 06/18/08
Moving and beautiful.
Quite an unexpected ending.
Blessings, Norms
Beckie Stewart06/18/08
Definitely in need in a tissue. This was right to the point in great "showing" language.
Debbie Wistrom06/18/08
You really socked it to us with that ending...well done and keep up the good words!
Glynis Becker 06/18/08
You sure packed a wollop into a very few words. Bravo!