The Official Writing Challenge
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Well done! A topic that will resonate with many of us. A few minor crits--I'm not sure you need so much info about your driving a mercedes, unless it's to make the point that you have enough money to give your mom so she can keep the house. My only other crit is that in the 2nd paragraph you repeat that you are glad your mother is selling the house. like that you have included a lot of good dialogue, which puts us nicely in the situation. Great job!
I liked how this story ended. It's true that our own homes may not seem very special to other people, but to us, they are treasures worth keeping. Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.