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I liked the relationship between the brother and sister. It seemed to be a strong bond.

I didn't quite get this part:

The ‘Hum-frum-diggelumphs’ were our pet family hate. On three occasions they invaded our home. We wondered why Dad allowed them to stay. They treated Mum like a servant, until even we became indignant.


Overall, this was a very good story of two siblings who had fond memories of their home. Thank you for sharing!
06/06/08
This was a very good read. I too was a little confused about the "family hate." I did love the idea of the picnic - that was first rate creativity.
06/07/08
The anguish is well communicated here. It’s a bit hard to work out exactly what’s going on and what provoked the visit. But I liked the way you tied in the various familiar sayings from Mum – giving your piece a homely touch.
06/10/08
Oh, such a nice brother/sister relationship here; (oh how I wish my brother and I could communicate) - thanks for sharing such a nice homey atmostphere for us...nicely done.