The Official Writing Challenge
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Your last sentence summed up very well what "cousins" means. I could identify with parental expectations--probably have had some of my own. :-) You showed in your story that we make our choices about how best to worship God.
Very well done! I, too, tripped a bit over the first sentence. Think about re-arranging it something like, "Our parents were two brothers and a sister, and we cousins...." It would put the story in perspective right away. Otherwise, no other nits. I could identify with the guilt that comes from sometimes just needing to be quiet at home. You expressed that very well.
Loved the part "differences that took our lives down purple and blue lines on a map." And yet not so different. Good "food for thought" in this story. Enjoyed reading it.