The Official Writing Challenge
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Your last sentence summed up very well what "cousins" means. I could identify with parental expectations--probably have had some of my own. :-) You showed in your story that we make our choices about how best to worship God.
Very well done! I, too, tripped a bit over the first sentence. Think about re-arranging it something like, "Our parents were two brothers and a sister, and we cousins...." It would put the story in perspective right away. Otherwise, no other nits. I could identify with the guilt that comes from sometimes just needing to be quiet at home. You expressed that very well.
06/02/08
Loved the part "differences that took our lives down purple and blue lines on a map." And yet not so different. Good "food for thought" in this story. Enjoyed reading it.