The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 613 times
Member Comments
Great use of dialogue and flashback examples--really engaged me since I wanted to know more. The last paragraph, however, just didn't work for me in bringing closure on Mike and his thievery. (Unfortunately I think of a suggestion--sorry.) My favorite phrase was "detected a spot of larceny in his heart." That seemed to be the central defining characteristic of Mike. I laughed aloud about the stolen roast.
I loved hearing of Mike's capers, so funny! The ending didn't work for me either, but by then I understood more about why you whimpered at the beginning. What a character he must've been!
A delightfully funny tale of a beloved "thief". Very entertainining and I enjoyed the romp; however, like the other commentators, the last paragaph was a disappointment after reading such a great entry...but it was written very well. Loved the Title.
Congratulations on taking 8th place in your level with this piece, Darlene!