The Official Writing Challenge
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I suggest that you focus on sentence structure. The over use of "and" throughout the short piece is overkill. Try to use other words and redefine the senteces with the use of commas, or substitute words.

Very nice theme, just gets lost in the "and".
I enjoyed hearing about your cat.

Don't be afraid to use your full 750 word count to tell your story. I was yearning to hear more about you and your relationship with your cat.

Also, there are some punctuation errors (missing commas, etc..) that can be easily fixed to make your piece even better.

Thank you for sharing this. :)
I would love to have more detail, but I loved what you did have to say. My cat is exactly the same way.