The Official Writing Challenge
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05/08/08
A good way to write a devotional--with a great story which leads to an important object lesson.

I'd encourage you to use more of your allotted words, and to help your readers to really feel the desperation of both the rescue-r and the rescue-ee.

If this isn't true, you sure made it seem very real! Good job.
You have an excellent devotional tied to an interesting story.
05/11/08
A very well written story and a good devotional. The first story tells of a possible death resulting from an unintentional act of disobedience. The latter story of Cain and Abel, on the other hand, results in death by deliberate act of disobedience against God. Whether intentional or otherwise, we, as children of God, are all called to play a part in sharing the gospel to save the drowning world!