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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Sibling(s) (05/01/08)

TITLE: Tommy and Teresa’s Monopoly® Marathon
By Tim Pickl
05/06/08


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The mid-1970s was an era when video games were in their infancy, and board games still reigned.

In 1975, Tommy turned 14. He could outrun and outplay his 7-year-old sister Teresa at just about everything—except Monopoly®.

Teresa loved to play Monopoly® with Tommy —and not just one game—she insisted they play several games, for hours and hours.

Tommy affectionately called it their Monopoly® Marathon.


“Aha! I got Park Place. I’ll buy a hotel. I’m gonna beat you again, Tommy.” Teresa boasted.

“Oh, no you’re not! We’ll play all night if we have to. I need to beat you at least once.” Tommy replied, yawning.

“We’ll see about that! Mom and Dad are playin’ cards upstairs with Uncle Bob and Auntie Irene—and they always stay up real late on Saturdays.”

Tommy suddenly warned, “Oh-oh – here he comes!”

Dad loudly stomped down the wooden basement stairs. Then, Dad teasingly asked, “Are you still playing that game?”

“Yes sir, it’s another Monopoly® Marathon. I’m gonna beat her this time, Dad.”

“You’ll never beat me, Tommy!”

“Well, you both need to get to bed soon. We have to get up for church in the morning.”

“Awww, come on, Daddy! I wanna beat Tommy again.”

“Yeah, Dad, please? I’ll stop lettin’ her win for once.”

“You liar! You never let me win!” Teresa shot back.

“I did too let you win!”

“No way! I beat you fair and square!”

Dad played the peacemaker. “Okay, okay, settle down right now. You can stay up for a little while longer—but not TOO late!” He turned, and clopped back up the steps.

“Thanks Daddy!” Teresa said, giggling.

“Yeah, thanks Dad.”

Then, as Dad, Mom, Uncle Bob and Aunt Irene cackled and conversed upstairs, Tommy and Teresa’s Monopoly® Marathon continued until almost dawn.

+++

Rose-colored sunbeams shone through the windows that Sunday morning. Dad quietly went into the basement and immediately saw Tommy and Teresa stretched out on opposite sides of the Monopoly® board on the floor, sound asleep.

He grabbed a couple of colorful quilted blankets and covered them.

“I beat you…” Teresa muttered, and turned over.

Dad smiled as he saw a stack of $500 Monopoly® bills still clutched in her hand.

+++

The siblings moved to different States after they grew up, but always kept in touch. During that time, Teresa and Tommy sent pictures and handwritten memories via U.S. Mail. When e-mail became available, it was a great blessing, because they saved money on postage. Soon, they were instantaneously sharing pictures and memories.

Teresa lived furthest away from Mom and Dad, and rarely got a chance to see them, except during one of the major holidays every year.

Then, on a Saturday morning in May 2008, Teresa received an e-mail invitation from Tommy:

Tommy challenges you to play Monopoly® On-Line—

Intrigued--with a flashback giggle—Teresa opened it and clicked on the hyperlink provided in the body of the message. Then, as soon as Teresa registered on the Monopoly® website, Tommy received a confirmation via a text message on his iPhone. Within seconds, Tommy went on-line with his iPhone and accepted Teresa’s challenge to play.

A window popped up on Teresa’s computer: Tommy is Ready to Play!

Teresa reached for her pink, bling-studded cell phone and voice-commanded, “Tommy!” and the phone autodialed Tommy’s number.

“Hi Tommy! I miss you.”

“Oh, hi Sis.! I miss you, too. What do you think about the game?”

“I think it’s WONderful. Even though we live so far apart, we can start up our Monopoly® Mora, Marrow—“

“Monopoly Marathon—that’s right, Sis. And tonight’s your night to lose.”

“You’ll never beat me!” Teresa boasted, laughing.

“Oh yes I will--just watch. I am now the Master.” Tommy said, mocking Darth Vader’s voice in Star Wars IV, and ended the call.

Immediately, Tommy speed-dialed his Dad. “She took the bait. We’ll play four games, then I’ll call you back.”

+++

“Aha! I got Park Place again, big Bro.!” Teresa boasted, speaking to her laptop. “You’re gonna lose again!

There was a gentle knock at Teresa’s front door. “Who could that be?” she wondered aloud. She set her laptop down, then went to the door and slowly opened it.

It was Mom and Dad--and Tommy.

“Daddy? Momma? Tommy? Wha--what’re ya’ll doin’ here?”

Then, Dad asked Teresa, smiling, “Are you still playing that game?”
and handed her a stack of $500 Monopoly® bills.

She laughed, with tears, and hugged them all.

“I finally won!” Tommy joked.


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Verna Cole Mitchell 05/08/08
I enjoyed traveling through the years with Tommy and Teresa with their game and liked the surprise for Teresa at the conclusion.
Jan Ackerson 05/09/08
Clever--I love to play games, so this really appealed to me.
James Dixon05/09/08
I remember playing time and time again- trying to get that illusive win.

I wonder if it would be possible to say that Monopoly is a registered trade mark of Waddingtons? It would save distracting the reader. You could clarify this issue by asking on the Faithwriters Message Forum.

Long live the board game.
Debbie Fuhry05/12/08
I like seeing a childhood rivalry carried into adulthood as a positive thing.

Good story... must be good memories behind it!
LauraLee Shaw05/12/08
Way cute! I have similar memories of the game "Sorry." It could get pretty heated! Great job!
Lyn Churchyard05/12/08
Ahhh, true sibling rivalry, what fun! An enjoyable story from start to finish Tim.
Debbie Wistrom05/12/08
I loved following the techonology advances. Great twist.

Well done.
Joshua Janoski05/13/08
Monopoly is my all time favorite board game, and so I really related to this piece. I love all types of games, but there is nothing quite like sitting down with the family to a nice board game on a weekend evening.

I liked how you showed the progression of technology and how it allowed the brother and sister to continue their tradition even when separated by distance. Your ending was nice too. Thank you for sharing.
Beckie Stewart05/13/08
What a delightful story. One of my favorite games to play with my dad. Just played it two weeks ago with my kids and lost!!! I even had Park Place!
Dee Yoder 05/14/08
Wow, the modern way to play, huh? Enjoyed this sibling tale very much!
Laury Hubrich 05/14/08
Loved this story! Great job!
Laury
Mariane Holbrook05/14/08
This was a fun read. Who hasn't played Monopoly and can identify with this piece? Very good job!
Beth LaBuff 05/14/08
We had a few Monopoly marathons too. Your title brought back a lot of memories. This is great! I love the ending and the hand-delivered stack of $500 monopoly bills.
Sara Harricharan 05/14/08
Awww! This was so cute and fun! I loved that the games could continue all the way into the change over with digital, etc. I enjoyed it very much! ^_^
Joanne Sher 05/14/08
Fun, cute, and a great job with characterization. Truly enjoyed this, Tim :)
Chely Roach05/15/08
This was very enjoyable read...well done!
LaNaye Perkins05/15/08
I loved how your story took me through a lifetime of memories. Well done!
LauraLee Shaw05/15/08
Congrats on Highly Commended, Tim! Soooooo happy for you!!!!
Sheri Gordon05/15/08
Congratulations on your Highly Commended. We've had some of these Monopoly marathons in our house, too. Nice job with the topic.
Helen Dowd 05/25/08
Cute! Very cute! And I could relate to Monopoly. My brother (2 years younger) and I whiled away baby sitting hours playing monopoly when we were in our early teens. So I could see you sitting there with your sister (or the sister in your story), playing all night. And it was refreshing bringing monopoly up to date via modern technology. That part is beyond me. Guess I don't have time for on-line games, but it was fun reading about it. Loved your story...Helen