The Official Writing Challenge
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You did a good job of showing the different personalities of children in a large family. The story about Petula sounded so real, I wondered if this was a true story.
05/08/08
Lots of characters here--it's wonderful to be a part of a large, loving family!

I almost think that the character of Eugenia might be unnecessary--she's one more in a large cast, and without her, you might be able to develop the other siblings' personalities more.

I liked the tumble of this family...thanks!
Oh I loved this story! The descriptions of the children was great. I especially loved "Inseparable, they sometimes flowed over and around Sally, enveloping her in their oneness, including her momentarily in their being." Absolutely first class. Well done!