The Official Writing Challenge
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Enjoyed reading this! Loved the "mommy mode" phrase. So true that jags are nothing to compare to one's child. Lovely.
What a neat little glimpse of life here. I liked that line with there were no tears/sobs on either side that day. Wonderful! I especially liked the first lines...^_^
You have a great story here packed with emotions many of us can relate to. To make it even better, you might want to build it up a bit more to the crash and perhaps more dialogue on both parts. It is a good scene worth developing further! How many of us have our children crash through a building!!:) So glad no one was hurt!