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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Mother (as in maternal parent) (04/24/08)

TITLE: THE WOMAN BEHIND MOMMA
By Paul Potenza
04/29/08


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THE WOMAN BEHIND MOMMA

No running in the house.

If you keep making that face it will freeze.

Once You give it, that's the end.

Her life was filled with phrases like that and those phrases defined her to her children. Her children never saw beyond the phrases to the person that they only considered Momma. Her children never saw the beautiful young woman that so enticed their father as well as a hundred other men. They never saw her beautiful shock of auburn hair or her svelte figure.

They only saw Momma.

They never saw Teresa.

She was well into her seventies and she was starting to lose her hair. Not a big thing for a guy but for a woman...God.

She had a lot of grandkids now but she could still feel her youth. She could laugh out loud with the best of them but when she looked in the mirror she could see the bald spots in her scalp of silver grey and she would wonder and become angry and cry sometimes.

Then one day it happened.

She was cuddling grandaughter Tara who was four years old. Tara snuggled against her chest and reached up and twirrled a lock of fine silver hair in her fingers and said "Gramma you have such beautiful hair". PING! Instant favorite grandchild.

The child saw through everything that we had missed as her children. You Moms out there need no further explaination. We fathers and husbands and sisters and brothers could learn a lesson from this child who saw beyond. She saw beyond the scalp and the discipline and the motherhood and the wifely duty and dared to touch the beauty that is...

the woman behind Momma.


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Deborah Cooke05/03/08
And isn't there always - the woman behind the mother we feel we need to be?
Helen Murray05/04/08
What a beautiful point to make. And no wonder Jesus taught us to be like little children. How pure their hearts are. Well done!
Julie Arduini05/04/08
To give momma a name was especially endearing. So often moms get lost in their role. This was a very good read.
Joy Faire Stewart05/04/08
Oh, what a wonderful lesson and from a child's POV. Excellent entry!
Sara Harricharan 05/06/08
This is good! I like the idea of looking past to see the woman behind "Momma" I especially liked the line with "Ping! Instant favorite grandchild!" Wonderful job, I enjoyed this short piece very much!