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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Mother (as in maternal parent) (04/24/08)

TITLE: Mother an article?
By rae flandorfer
04/29/08


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Mother oh Mother how could you be so
I thought that you loved me even though

But alas all you saw was my sin
Instead of what God had placed within

Over and over I tried to say
Give me a chance another day

But my ways were annoying to you
Not good enough sheíll never do

I kept on trying to win that place
In your heart but itís been erased

Years and years have wandered by
And you still try to make me cry

With the words you use to hurt
Even my children see the dirt

Your tidy ways and clean up look
Are not what God said in the book

Children given for Motherís to share
Godís love for others and to care

Some have forgotten their first love
And yes God watches from above


Her child was dying, His life He gave
His mother waited she could not save

But she loved Him even more
He died for us opening the door

The door of forgiveness another chance
But for some itís not their dance

Thank you for trying, you did your best
God knows our sorrow and the test

He will make all things right you know
Shine a light explain canít wait to go.


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BOB BLACKMAN05/02/08
That was very sad. I'm glad there was some redemption in the line, "Thank you for trying, you did your best." Sometimes I think belittling is the worst form of abuse.
Helen Murray05/04/08
Oh, there are so many who suffered their parent's mothering style. It really hurts, and it's so good God enables us to break the cycle.
Sara Harricharan 05/06/08
Oooh, sad. It flowed very well though! I liked this verse the most:

"Her child was dying, His life He gave
His mother waited she could not save"

Very nicely done! ^_^