The Official Writing Challenge
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04/17/08
Moody and atmospheric--nice job with that aspect of your story.

Be careful of overuse of adverbs. Strong nouns and verbs are almost always a better choice.
04/17/08
What a perfect name for a beautiful baby girl--and your Title! This is a great story.
04/22/08
I could feel his heart. Well done.
04/24/08
A very poignant story. Could use polishing for content and proofreading for typos. Keep writing.