The Official Writing Challenge
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04/17/08
A good character study, with well-chosen words and fine imagery.

I'm not sure that I feel I really know this man, though, as I would if you'd included some dialogue, perhaps, or expanded on one particular "telling" incident in his life. This is like an excellent pencil sketch of a whole landscape--could you give us an oil painting of one detail?

Just a thought--you're a very good writer.

04/19/08
What a beautiful account. I loved your closing lines: our wealth was measured in love. Beautiful.